tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-38905172.post100440283873160028..comments2023-12-29T08:35:56.504-05:00Comments on the rising mist: autumn breezenorahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02228725106863747984noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-38905172.post-79563724591465081132010-08-30T04:16:30.890-04:002010-08-30T04:16:30.890-04:00It's good that you are aware of the danger of ...It's good that you are aware of the danger of repeating certain words. <br /><br />It used to be a big fad to have <b><i>"silence"</i></b> or <b><i>"silent"</i></b>; <b><i>"still"</i></b> and <b><i>"stillness"</i></b>; and <b><i>"shadows"</i></b> in almost every haiku at one.<br /><br />The late Peter Williams (Watford U.K.) did some great spoof haiku about these fads.<br /><br />There was one about him waking up early one morning and his shadow making a cup of tea for him. ;-)<br /><br />all my best<br /><br />Alan<br />The With Words Haiku Competition 2010: <a href="http://www.withwords.org.uk/comp.html" rel="nofollow">weblink</a><br />.Area 17https://www.blogger.com/profile/07472190637554124160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-38905172.post-65263101071404082702010-08-29T19:53:36.238-04:002010-08-29T19:53:36.238-04:00Thank you, Alan. I'm finding that *I* am using...Thank you, Alan. I'm finding that *I* am using sussurrus too frequently, maybe as a poetic crutch. Reminds me of the use of "conjure" a decade ago. Throw it in a string of prose, and you've got a poem. :-)norahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02228725106863747984noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-38905172.post-86339307251020115922010-08-28T13:05:07.921-04:002010-08-28T13:05:07.921-04:00I always love a haiku with sussurus.
Here's a...I always love a haiku with <i>sussurus</i>.<br /><br />Here's a verse from a haibun:<br /><br /><i>susurrus of moths <br />round fire that flickers on<br />like the night<br /></i><br /><br />all my best,<br /><br />Alan<br />The With Words International Online Haiku Competition 2010: <a href="http://www.withwords.org.uk/comp.html" rel="nofollow">weblink to competition page</a><br />.Area 17https://www.blogger.com/profile/07472190637554124160noreply@blogger.com