deep winter--
fragile ice fringes
the meadow pond
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4 comments:
Nora... My silliness here: "It Takes Two to Tanka?"
_Humbly I add these "Two" lines to your good haiku.
> a lonely swan lingers
> where this open rill begins
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Thanks, Magyar. A lovely addition.
You're not off-base. A collaborative tanka where one poet writes the first three lines and the other writes the final two (traditionally 57577, but now it's just 5 lines) is called renga. You frequently see it in haiku publications.
-JUST A NOTE-
Nora,
_I should have referred to your haiku as hokku... I'm familiar with most ancient Japanese forms.
_I lost favor with (or they with me) Wonder Haiku Worlds, but I recently posted a haibun there, and perhaps you'd do me the honor of visiting WHW and reviewing that posting -Impossible-. I first bumped into John McDonald at WHW.
I should have known, Magyar, that you wouldn't require a forms lesson from me. You're obviously a thoughtful, talented poet.
I checked out "Impossible" on WHW. I like it very much. Well-crafted and lyrical. My favorite is the second paragraph, but it's all just lovely. I bow.
I can't imagine anyone falling out with you, so it must be you with them.
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