"Art does not reflect the visible; rather, it makes visible" ~Paul Klee
I always love a haiku with sussurus.Here's a verse from a haibun:susurrus of moths round fire that flickers onlike the nightall my best,AlanThe With Words International Online Haiku Competition 2010: weblink to competition page.
Thank you, Alan. I'm finding that *I* am using sussurrus too frequently, maybe as a poetic crutch. Reminds me of the use of "conjure" a decade ago. Throw it in a string of prose, and you've got a poem. :-)
It's good that you are aware of the danger of repeating certain words. It used to be a big fad to have "silence" or "silent"; "still" and "stillness"; and "shadows" in almost every haiku at one.The late Peter Williams (Watford U.K.) did some great spoof haiku about these fads.There was one about him waking up early one morning and his shadow making a cup of tea for him. ;-)all my bestAlanThe With Words Haiku Competition 2010: weblink.
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