Tuesday, December 09, 2008

frozen

frozen pond--
only moon glides across
its dark glass

3 comments:

Marty said...

frozen pond - -
only moon "skates" across
its dark glass

a slight change from a hockey fan

Ken Wagner said...

"Skates" does add a bit more texture. Nicely done.

nora said...

Thank you, Marty and Ken. I truly appreciate your suggestions, but I like the gentler gliding and its alliteration with glass.

I thought of "skate," but it seemed too easy, and the feminine moon, in its slow arc, to me, glides. :-)